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Intimacy in 55 words


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Clasped hands, gasping breath, moist lips and eyes filled with desire they were about to relish their wild fantasy. Embraced in eternal bliss they sensed, for instance, a paradise. They endured intimacy like never before.

No evil could dare to separate those fervent souls but the harsh tone of alarm which crushed his dream, often. 

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PS: My foray into the world of 55 word stories. Enlighten me with your criticism or Laud with acclaim. I thank you.

PPS: I hate alarms.

(PS and PPS is one more 55 words story I guess…lol)

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52 comments:

  1. RohiniJune 21, 2012 at 5:45 AM

    loved it! absolutely!

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    1. MakJune 21, 2012 at 10:37 AM

      I am delighted with your comment Rohu. Thanks a ton :)

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  2. magiceyeJune 21, 2012 at 6:54 AM

    wonderfully done!!

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  3. umashankarJune 21, 2012 at 7:30 AM

    Loved the completeness of your piece. Wonderful!

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    1. MakJune 21, 2012 at 10:41 AM

      Uma sir, i am honored with your compliment. Thank you very much.

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  4. Dee...June 21, 2012 at 9:06 AM

    Just loved this.....

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  5. MakJune 21, 2012 at 10:42 AM

    I am glad you liked it Dee...
    Wish to read your lines sometime.

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  6. AmitAagJune 21, 2012 at 12:07 PM

    ...fantastic Mak:)!

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  7. Jayashree SrivatsanJune 21, 2012 at 1:06 PM

    Super Dooper Mak!

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    1. Jayashree SrivatsanJune 21, 2012 at 1:07 PM

      Btw even I hate alarms....Esp when I have to go to work after i hear it ring :)

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    2. MakJune 21, 2012 at 3:44 PM

      Jaishree, Glad you liked it :) Thank you for a wonderful comment.

      Alarms are the worst things to start the day with :)

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  8. A Homemaker's UtopiaJune 21, 2012 at 1:43 PM

    Very nice post Mak..:-)

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  9. BikramJune 21, 2012 at 5:58 PM

    he he hee Sounds like story of my life .. I need to switch off the alarm next time i sleep and WHO knows what happens then :)
    beautiful story sir.

    Bikram's

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  10. MakJune 21, 2012 at 7:45 PM

    We might know if you wake up and tell us ;-)
    Go ahead Bik..turn off the bloody alarm :-)

    Thank you for the kind words sir

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  11. My life My wayJune 22, 2012 at 11:09 AM

    Nice One... And wish your dreams dont get disturbed by any alarms in future.... I too Hate alarms ...

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    1. MakJune 22, 2012 at 3:51 PM

      Thanks a lot for visiting my blog. Wish to see you here often :)

      So nice of you to wish me :)

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  12. TTTJune 22, 2012 at 4:53 PM

    loved it ! so much in 55 words !

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  13. BhavanaJune 22, 2012 at 9:43 PM

    hahaha!!! Change the word "alarm" to "opportunity"--then opportunity clock will awaken you to more delicious possibility of intimacy:):)

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  14. MakJune 22, 2012 at 10:27 PM

    A warm welcome here TangyTomatoTwist :) wish to see you often.
    I am overwhelmed with joy after reading your comment. Thank you so much. Made my day.

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  15. MakJune 22, 2012 at 10:32 PM

    Bhavana, opportunity has been knocking else where :-)
    Super like your words 'more delicious possibilty of intimacy'.

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  16. A Homemaker's UtopiaJune 23, 2012 at 11:47 AM

    Hi Mak,
    Award waiting for you..:-)
    http://ahomemakersutopia.blogspot.in/2012/06/awards-galore.html

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  17. MakJune 23, 2012 at 6:21 PM

    Thanks a lot for the award Nagini gaaru :)

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  18. UnknownJune 24, 2012 at 4:21 PM

    loved it...short crisp and meaningful

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  19. MakJune 24, 2012 at 4:27 PM

    Thanks a lot Alka. Am delighted and glad that you like this :)

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  20. NideeshJune 26, 2012 at 10:01 AM

    Mak remember our PEP training... Alarms are used to give an awareness of panic situations... It should be a Pleasant wake up call and not with a panic alert... Get married soon Mak to get peaceful wake up call with a sweet touch of moist lips...:-)

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    1. MakJune 26, 2012 at 10:24 PM

      Words of experience...? :) Yeah will get married soon to see my dreams coming alive.

      I do remember PEP Nideesh.

      Thank you for dropping by. Take some time out to read my other posts as well buddy :)

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  21. AJEYA RAOJune 26, 2012 at 1:41 PM

    Stop Dreaming. :-) Nice writeup.

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    1. MakJune 26, 2012 at 10:25 PM

      I wish i could control my dreams Ajeya :) I wouldn't have let the alarm break them.

      Thank you very much.

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  22. NehaJune 26, 2012 at 11:25 PM

    ahh, too bad it was just a dream ;) ... Your F-55 is fab Mak, thanks for sharing it :)

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    1. MakJune 27, 2012 at 9:18 AM

      Yeah Neha, it was only a dream :)
      Thank you for dropping by. I am glad you liked it.

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  23. EchuJune 28, 2012 at 1:17 PM

    So nice Mak!! Wats the background of the number 55?? My special wishes for your dreams to come true soon!! Lets the alarms rest for that day!!:)

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  24. UnknownJune 29, 2012 at 11:38 AM

    A touch of humor always works for me :)

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  25. MakJune 29, 2012 at 3:05 PM

    Echu, thanks a lot. Fiction 55 is all about writing something in 55 words. This was my first take at it.
    Thank you for the warm wishes. I will make sure to keep alarms far far away from me :)

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  26. MakJune 29, 2012 at 3:08 PM

    Ghazala ji, honored with your presence here. Thank you so much.
    I am glad that i tickled you with a touch of my humor. Wish to see you often :)

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  27. Saru SinghalJuly 4, 2012 at 3:30 AM

    Good one...It has all the elements of 55. Keep on writing!

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  28. MakJuly 4, 2012 at 10:29 PM

    Saru, thanks a lot. These words of appreciation coming from you is a great honour for me.

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  29. 55 loverJuly 6, 2012 at 9:03 PM

    Awesome Mak awesome :)
    good take....
    you can go heights in 55 :)

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  30. MakJuly 7, 2012 at 1:05 AM

    Thanks a lot Dee :)

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  31. Sri ValliJuly 10, 2012 at 10:29 PM

    Romantic post...<3

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  32. Privy TriflesJuly 14, 2012 at 11:17 PM

    Lovely 55 fiction - perfect justice to the story.

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    1. MakJuly 16, 2012 at 6:04 PM

      Thanks a lot Privytrifles :) I am glad you were here.

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  33. Words KraftJuly 15, 2012 at 8:21 AM

    Brilliant :)

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    1. MakJuly 16, 2012 at 6:05 PM

      Thank you so much Soham. A warm welcome to you. Wish to see you often :)

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  34. Anjali SainiAugust 12, 2012 at 10:57 PM

    Awesome Mak .. :)
    I just love reading 55 words stories. I will also try it soon.

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  36. UnknownJune 20, 2017 at 12:16 AM

    What a lovely dream jahan panah... ok l will give peace of wake up call to u with touch of moist lips everyday insha allah.

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